I'll need your help with my entry. I'm allowed 140 characters to pitch my novel, On Fallen Wings, to the agent. Every word, every character, every space is valuable and could doom my entry or help it soar. I'll post my initial thought below and it's your job/duty/pleasure to tear it apart and tell me what you think. Here it is:
When her boyfriend disappears, a Faerie's search for answers forces her to choose between the life she loves and the life he could lose.
I love all of the feedback. Give me more! Many of you have asked that I incorporate names into the pitch. I agree; I think the names of the characters add value to the pitch. The dilemma is the 140 character limit. The next version doesn't have names. Let me know what you think. Here's the latest:
When a Faerie's boyfriend is kidnapped, her quest to save him forces her to choose between betraying her village and watching him die.
Something else. 10:40 pm
I'm putting in the name! Let me know how this works:
When Rhiannon's boyfriend is kidnapped, her quest to save him forces her to choose between the Faerie life she loves and losing him forever.