One page, just two hundred and fifty words can change the life of an author forever. Why? Because they are the introduction to the story you’re about to tell. They set the stage. They are the hook. If your reader turns the page then you’ve done your job.
I’ve entered the Made of Awesome Contest hosted by the amazing Shelley Watters. Contests like this are fun because they give everyone a chance to provide feedback on each other’s work. I enjoy the process as much as I enjoy writing and am excited to share my work with you. Please enjoy the first page of On Fallen Wings.
The Darkness Between Trees
For as long as I could remember, Faeries had danced at Stone Meadow.
I loved dancing and the night was perfect, like a dream. I was innocent to its graces. Raising my arms, I leaned my head back to absorb glowing blue rays on my face and hands. Then I closed my eyes and caressed the cold tips of grass with my feet, repeating the familiar sway of my steps. As a frosty wisp of air stirred me from my trance, I swept my gown in a circle and spun to where my young sister, Leila, sat watching.
She reached up and parted a long strand of hair from my face. “That was wonderful,” she said. “Are you nervous for tomorrow?”
“Oh, yes.” I fell to the grass. “I can’t believe this is happening.” Then I covered my face with both hands and moaned with joy. “My Day of Promise, at last!”
Leila rolled onto her stomach and leaned on her elbows, propping her chin with her palms. “What is it like to be in love?”
I grinned at her curiosity and stretched my arms straight. “It’s like dancing barefoot in the meadow under moonlight,” I told her. “Love tickles your toes and then climbs to your heart.” I rolled on the grass. “It spirals toward your fingertips as you spin and spin. Then it reaches up to the moon, grabs its rays, and pulls them down like a warm blanket.”
Leila sighed. My sister’s wide eyes revealed their wanting.
There they are. Two hundred and fifty words. This portion of the contest is about feedback. What ideas do you have that will make the page better? What needs improvement? What did you like? Thanks in advance for visiting and offering your comments.